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selfish & humble
waiting for sin
as the best years of my life
crawl into the sea

[the wings left no room for ribs]
The Awakening, Kate Chopin.

"A bird with a broken wing was beating the air above, reeling, fluttering, circling disabled down, down to the water."



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LightToDarkness Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
The awakening is one of my favorite books.  Nice piece you got here too.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why, thank ya. :) It is a beautiful book--I could read those last few pages over and over...and those ideas about identity & children--that was amazing! 
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cality Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think I'll add that book to my 'to-be-read' list. :la:

This poem is powerful in spite of how short it is. The ending is beautifully done. <3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^^ That list is far too long for me! 

Thank you. :heart: I really wanted to try to grab some of the power that was in the novel. (Especially those ending scenes where the main character literally just walks off into the ocean.)
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cality Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, mine is ever-growing. :lol:

You're very welcome. :hug:
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Zevais Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist
empty & unsettled
left purity behind
as the worst moments of my death
climb out of the earth

[the ribs tear open the flesh on my back]
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you for that.
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Zevais Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist
you're very welcome
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:iconarinadadragonspeaker:
That book was so depressing. :meow: You really captured the ending magnificently here, though!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

:la: It was depressing--but I kind of saw a victory in it.

 

:D Thanks! I was really hoping to grasp the amazing feeling of that end in my own words.

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:iconarinadadragonspeaker:
Well, you succeeded, so huzzah! :D
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your stunning work has been featured here untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…! :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:la: Oh, thank you ever so much! A feature from you ...(twice now, I believe -faints a little inside-). I'm flattered, really. ^-^
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student Writer
I love that book.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's pretty great, isn't it? :meow: I tried to make as many references to that wonderful work as I could.
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   Writer
i love that book :heart::heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:'D A fellow fan! I tried to make as many references to it in this poem as I could. :3
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   Writer
you did a very good job! :aww:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear that from a writer such as yourself. :blush:
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   Writer
:love:
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Vatlaaw Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love this!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Amazing work. the power behind your words is breath-taking. :D 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^-^ I'm glad you think so! (Oh, do you want your breath back by any chance?) As always, thank you so much for the comment. :heart: :heart:
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
For something like this you can keep it and you're welcome :D
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
-Places air a balloon- Whatever you say.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
:D
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
oh the power contained within these words. 
the last line has to be my favorite part, but i love how blunt the title is.
ugh, everything about this is amazing.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Thank you for all those kind words. :heart: Since you mentioned the last line, I'd like to say that it has a lot to do with "The Awakening," which I quoted at the bottom. It's based after a scene where the main character's friend starts feeling her shoulders, saying she's checking for "strong wings." Otherwise, she won't be able to, well, go against the grain like she's trying to. In the end, the main character ends up having wings that are strong enough, but...well, I don't want to spoil the end, if you haven't read it. ^-^

I meant the title to be sort of...blunt. But, in a kind of--I don't know how to describe it--bitter but hopeless way. :shrug:

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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
ooh, that sounds very interesting. i'll have to read it sometime. :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's a pretty good book. :meow:
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wdnest Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Wonderful work.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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foraoises Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   Writer
wow, short but powerful. :) (Smile) 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's what I was going for. :)
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