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my cat
has turned
my front porch

into a graveyard

as if to say:
this is what we need

but tonight
she tried to lick my claws
back to hands

& I said to her:

"I do not have 9 lives
to spend on the bathroom floor
with 13-hour insomnia

can't we just kill the mockingbirds
pull the concrete
out of our throats
& get this dying
over with
already"

but
she's got 8 lives down
& doesn't answer questions twice
Oh, I lost my sense of rhythm again. >:l

My cat & I are the same age, by the way. She's rather old in cat "years." ^^
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Hashae Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry to hear that, hope she's strong.
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drosera-sundews Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really powerful, I love it. 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, thank you so much! :D 
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miserabel Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The beginning caught my eye - because the imagery of a cat turning your front porch into a graveyard is already beautiful - but it's the ending line which really had me sold. "she's got 8 lives down / & doesn't answer questions twice". Very nice! :clap:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :) A lot of people seemed to like this one, which is good, since I'm using it to apply to a few poetry-related events. ^^'
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Personghost Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
I log the off kilter rhythm of his (probably because I'm the same way and I don't know how to stop) and the way this written  its beautiful
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
>-> I'm not really sure how to stop either. Damn free verse, letting me be weird. :XD:

Thank you. :heart:
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Personghost Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
*love *this (oops)
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lotusfreya Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014
this is distinct... i like your style :) 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thanks!
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