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my cat
has turned
my front porch

into a graveyard

as if to say:
this is what we need

but tonight
she tried to lick my claws
back to hands

& I said to her:

"I do not have 9 lives
to spend on the bathroom floor
with 13-hour insomnia

can't we just kill the mockingbirds
pull the concrete
out of our throats
& get this dying
over with
already"

but
she's got 8 lives down
& doesn't answer questions twice
Oh, I lost my sense of rhythm again. >:l

My cat & I are the same age, by the way. She's rather old in cat "years." ^^
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Hashae Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry to hear that, hope she's strong.
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drosera-sundews Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really powerful, I love it. 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, thank you so much! :D 
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miserabel Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The beginning caught my eye - because the imagery of a cat turning your front porch into a graveyard is already beautiful - but it's the ending line which really had me sold. "she's got 8 lives down / & doesn't answer questions twice". Very nice! :clap:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :) A lot of people seemed to like this one, which is good, since I'm using it to apply to a few poetry-related events. ^^'
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Personghost Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
I log the off kilter rhythm of his (probably because I'm the same way and I don't know how to stop) and the way this written  its beautiful
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
>-> I'm not really sure how to stop either. Damn free verse, letting me be weird. :XD:

Thank you. :heart:
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Personghost Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
*love *this (oops)
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lotusfreya Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014
this is distinct... i like your style :) 
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thanks!
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist
this made me give a cold stare at my kitten, Loki, as he sleeps on the pillow of my bed next to my desk wondering if he has ever been awake for thirteen hours in a row...
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My cat Timmy is sitting on my lap right now, sleeping. I have no doubts he has not gone more than 3 hours awake.

Ah, kittens. :meow:
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
"can't we just kill the mockingbirds
pull the concrete
out of our throats
& get this dying
over with 
already"

this is magical
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I can't say I used much of that to write this...but thanks. :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh, I love the jolty flow. :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :) I think a lot of others did too...which is good, because I was drawing a blank on whether it was even there!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013   Writer
I really like the flow of this piece. :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the comment, dear. :) I'm glad you liked it!
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013   Writer
You're most welcome!
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cality Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think this flows very well! I liked the first four lines in particular. :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm...they do set the scene pretty well. :XD:
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cality Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed! :glomp:
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is stunning. <3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :blush:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is breathtaking.
and no, sweetie.  the rhythm worked so beautifully with this.
i am literally speechless and have no words to say that could compare to this.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, that's reassuring. By losing my sense of rhythm I meant I couldn't tell if it even had one or not. (Unfortunately, that does happen to me. I simply no longer can say.) 

Thank you for all those kind words. That means a lot coming from you. :heart: (Speechless is a very kind word in the lack of them. ^^)
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it definitely had one--a beautiful one.  (and do not worry, darling. i don't think rhythm in the face of riveting words means much to those of us who adore your work.)

anytime :heart: you are such a wonderful writer.  i'm so envious. :tighthug:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You know, you polish my ego so much one day I think I may actually be a confident writer. The thought. :XD: 
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that's a good thing though!  i'll inflate your ego until it explodes, m'dear.  c:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
-pop-
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no, it can't explode just yet!  i'm not finished!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's okay, it was held together by tape and half a gluestick. (: It's not that hard to get back together. 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Please refrain from the spam, dearie.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013   Writer
I'm sorry I haven't replied yet but my god each time I read this it gets even more awesome. I seriously didn't know it was possible to get even more...ugh...amazing. Serious. This is like jealous-worthy x108394374384. This is eye-candy and freaking word porn! aaaaahhh and i cannot get enough. You should totally publish a poetry book - I'd buy it ASAP. dsfdsfsdjhskjlasjdlaskh dkjashdksahds

:tighthug: 

accept my compliments pls :stare:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

o-o....Er...-shuffles feet- I don't know really how to respond to this except with the bowl of happiness.

:iconbowl1plz::iconbowl2plz:
:iconbowl3plz::iconbowl4plz:

You're always making my day better, you know that? :iconlovecuddleplz:

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scenikeight Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
I must be really stupid because no matter how many times I read this I still don't understand.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's okay. :) It's just a metaphor to mortality, using my cat's habit of bringing dead things to my porch as a springboard.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013   Writer
You're not stupid. I consider this a surreal poem and the interpretation is more open than usual...so...I'd just say whatever images you get, try to make sense of it and then come to a conclusion of what you think this poem is about. Hope it helps. :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thank ye. :'D You did a much better job explaining than I did.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013   Writer
You're welcome! :la: Well, that's generally how I figure out how to understand abstract or surreal poems, so I felt like helping someone out...you have to look at those types of poems in a different view than a simplistic one. :nod:
But I think you did just fine at explaining! You summed your poem up well with your original intentions and I see how that goes with the poem. I came up with something a bit darker, haha, but it's a great poem regardless!! :tighthug:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
True, true. :meow: With surreal  poems, two different heads can come up with very different meanings--as we can see here. :) Which makes me wonder, what did you come up with in regard to mine, will you tell?
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Kayou2 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
love this
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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Randomnessgirl101 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
f*** rhythm... this is pretty amazing with out it.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aha, thanks! :XD: I just seem to have forgotten how to give a poem rhythm when I wrote this...I'm glad it goes through well without it. :D
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Randomnessgirl101 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) XD YAYAAYAYAYAYAAAAAAAY! 
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PurpleRayRomeo Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this so much, it's beautiful and inspiring too <3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Calling a poem inspiring is probably one of the highest compliments you can give. :heart:
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