The work starts off quite nice but in the 'end' perhaps it sort of drifts. I mean the start is a very nice expression - thought if one thinks too hard, it turns confusing - till "all our pretty worlds" it goes well but the next... well it did register but it didn't sound like an ending. That said, it is emotional and so I guess I am fine with it coming this way
Okay, sorry, this is just a rather lazy poem. XD Thank you for the critique! This was one of the many poems I made that I never had an "ending" too, so I just tacked something on. Hence, it sounds a little bumpy. I'll see what I can do, and make sure I smooth it out in the future.