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dear someone,

there are no funerals
for the flesh

no hospitals
for the mind

no curtains & no cremations
for all our pretty words

paradigm,
you can't save every patient

sweet,
a corpse would warm your bed
love poem for no one. 

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Bleh, I need to stop writing this emotional shit. :XD:
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Writer
i came back to this poem again
very truthful
except according to your title, either i'm not dead, or i don't write poetry.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
XD I think I'm in the same boat! I'm pretty sure you're alive, though. :p Or, at least have a very well-trained ghost body. 
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Writer
lol
maybe the last one yes
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Girls who write poetry never die in a sense because their words live on in people. ;)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, we should hope! :) 
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
:D
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Desiree407 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's beautiful.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The work starts off quite nice but in the 'end' perhaps it sort of drifts. I mean the start is a very nice expression - thought if one thinks too hard, it turns confusing - till "all our pretty worlds" it goes well but the next... well it did register but it didn't sound like an ending. That said, it is emotional and so I guess I am fine with it coming this way :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sssshhh, don't tell anyone I wasn't trying! D: 

Okay, sorry, this is just a rather lazy poem. XD Thank you for the critique! This was one of the many poems I made that I never had an "ending" too, so I just tacked something on. Hence, it sounds a little bumpy. I'll see what I can do, and make sure I smooth it out in the future. :) 
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm... I will keep the secret!

lol I didn't realize it was a lazy poem :nod: Well I hope you are able to smooth it! When you do, tell me!

You are welcome!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome again :)
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Thief-in-darkness Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
i really like it this better than i could do
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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BlackCatNumberXIII Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Dead girls dont write poetry,
As she lay in a tomb forgotten,
Her words just traced in sand,
Wont wash away from the minds of many.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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hoppy01 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
Hopefully it's just frustration/depression that's made you say you "...need to stop writing this emotional shit."  Isn't EVERYthing you (one) write(s) "emotional shit"?  You may as well not bother writing then.  Don't be silly.  It's what makes it yours.

...unless maybe you're just disappointed by this poem.  It's not one of your best, but they all can't be gems.  Just get on with it already, and don't be a silly, little girl.  You're much too talented to throw away emotion even if that were possible; just embrace it and cherish the ride.  <3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I meant more so that my poetry is a direct reflection of my emotions, often, and I feel like "shit." Hence, my poetry comes out far more emotional than I'd like, and the emotions normally aren't very positive. Looking back through my gallery you may notice most of my pieces are far happier. :XD: (I don't like admitting it, but I was horribly in love & my poems show it, although that's fizzled to nothing by now.) So, I was more demeaning my emotions and the state of the poem. (In a way saying I need to be more positive and I also need to improve the quality of my poems.) 

I'll take your advice to heart, though. :heart: Thank you for it. 
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hoppy01 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
Just remember that no matter what you write, it is like a photograph which freezes that moment in time; it will NEVER come again no matter how hard you try.  ...so, happy, sad, good, bad -- whatever the emotion, the moment should be celebrated and cherished because it is new and fleeting and irreplaceable.  ...and hopefully it can be used to change the future for the better.

"...horribly in love..."  Now THERE's an oxymoron for you.  You have many years and much love to look forward to; it should only get better.  It may be difficult to realize at the time, but it all should be for your own good.  Cheer up, pilgrim; you cannot do anything to change or control the past.  Look forward and use what you have learned, my child.
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Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But emotion is good! ... Though I can probably see where you're coming from...
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Eh, emotions are the pallet of life...unfortunately my pallet was given to some sort of trascendental toddler. :XD: 

I don't even know what's going on in that metaphor.
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Macadamiannutjob Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014
love it.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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Nyekii Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That was very beautiful.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love this. 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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01vultur01 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Those who write poetry never, die... 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Only if we don't start burning books again. ;)
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01vultur01 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Indeed, that happened many time and will happen many times over...

But immortality doesn't find it's rest in books, but in the hearts and minds of the seeker...  
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yet, the objective of writing shouldn't be immortality. It's so much better than that.
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SSJCyberSonic Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is nice.

Good job.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. ^^
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Student Writer
there are no funerals
for the flesh

no hospitals
for the mind


:heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the comment. :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome.
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badperdition Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
love it. especially the 4th stanza
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart: I'm glad you do!
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Student Writer
<\3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconforeveraloneplz: 

Sorry, I couldn't help myself. :XD: I have a sense of humor, despite, I swear. 

Thanks for the comment. :)
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
:sniff:
:heart: no prob. <3
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