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I have heard that in 7 years
every cell in your body

is new

& isn't it beautiful that it will be
a body you have never touched

but I know that when your brain cells
die
fall like ashes through your skull

they stay dead
& I can never scrap the memories out of their corpses
I'll write another poem with this same title someday. I swear to you, kids. 

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Questions: I feel like this poem is a little immature. It doesn't seem to go well from one idea to the other--the space between "touched...but I know..." seems awkward. Also, it seems to me like this doesn't really move in stanzas like it's supposed to (especially the "die" part.) Thoughts? Comments? Critique? 

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CREDIT: So, I accidentally stole the first half of this ("I" to "touched") from another poet (from a slightly altered version on tumblr.) >:l I had no idea until someone pointed it out (thanks toxic-nebulae .) I have a rather bad memory, so I probably read it somewhere, forgot it, and then remembered it, thinking I was struck by a muse when I was really thieving.

So, all credit for that part to Brett Elizabeth Jenkins. 


If anyone feels like I should take this down because of this issue, please tell me. :heart:
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:iconwilliamson13:
williamson13 Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice. :)'
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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Alix1996 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is great! Clap 

First, today I learn something about cells.

Second, a poet sees everything as romantic and poetic figures. It deserves encouragement.

Lastly, the last sentence moves me.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:XD: I don't think that's actually true, unfortunately. I think they found out it happens at different rates for different people, or something. 

Thank you very much for the kind words. :heart:
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RufusMisser Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing!!!!Clapping Pony Icon - Princess Luna Clapping Pony Icon - Twilight Sparkle 
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :3
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Writer
well look who's been on tumblr
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So, I googl'd this and found the post. /: I'm now putting up that some person on tumblr said this first (I can't find who...) Also, I'm doing a little editing to add some quotations. 

I feel pretty shitty now. I have a really bad memory--I probably saw this and then remembered it again, not realizing that it wasn't mine. I'll should take this down... I feel horrible I almost stole someone's thoughts! 
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Writer

"today my professor told me
every cell in our entire body
is destroyed and replaced
every seven years.

how comforting it is to know
one day i will have a body

you will have never touched."

this is a poem by Brett Elizabeth Jenkins, and plenty of slightly changed and uncredited versions of it have been going around tumblr, so it's hard to say where you saw it first.



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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, okay. I'll credit that and say something about it. :s Thank you for telling me, again!
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