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at the bottom
there is
love
little hands
dissolving themselves

in the desperate
sunlight & waves
cut by ships
and continents

open
suspended
trembling as the water
passes through

hollow bodies restless
& agile
waiting for the sun
For Valentine's Day. Wee little phytoplankton lovers. :heart: Something sweet.

I'm a little unsure of the stanzas. They don't break up the poem as I wish--I mean, I could add comas to indicate breaks (i.e. after "love" in the first stanza) but I don't know...
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I've used the title of this piece in a poem for my Found Poetry Project Heart
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the honor! :D
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Stunning. Congratulations on the DLD!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! ^^
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A DLD!? :D Wow! That's wonderful. Thank you so much. :)
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello!

As part of =SilverInkblot's Found Poetry Project, I used the title of this beautiful deviation in a poem here:

Breaking Burdens

Thank you so much! :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored! Thank you so much! :heart:
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! nothing wrong with using stanzas for pauses/breaks - in fact i think it's really stylish and one of my favourite things about this poem. :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D Really!? Well, that's reassuring--as I stated before, I was bit worried about that.
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TaiHizake Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think the inferred breakups are fine. nice work. :D
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) Well, that's nice to hear. As I said, I was a bit worried they didn't allow the poem to flow the way I wanted it to.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
I think this is fine as it is. It is a beautiful piece of work :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:meow: Thank ye ever so kindly--that's quite reassuring.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
you're welcome and that's nice to hear so thank you as well :)
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Wonderful poem... :clap:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
You are very welcome... :dance:
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