Interesting. The way I saw it was, the boy was the innocent one and the girl wasn't. I liked that "twist" on gender stereotypes and all. This poem was quite entertaining and a bit humorous how it was played out in my head (the boy was kinda just dressed up all nice, wore nerdy clothes but hasa face of a jock. the girl looked like a better bella from twilight. ) It seemed to me like the boy was trying this new thing that the girl does every night as well. What I got from "this new thing" was 'hooking-up'. Very interesting read. So short, but still packed in a lot. I like it a lot!
I tried to put a spin on Biblical allusions. So many people use them darkly...>.>' I can see why though--religion tends to be kind of a...heavy...subject.
I wasn't really going with humor with this one, but those images in your head are waaayyy different than mine. I was sitting there thinking of the loss of innocence (the grass being trampled and not growing back), a dangerous sex-addiction (the girl was "bitten" [if you catch my drift -pervy me-] and is trying hurriedly to rid herself of the "venom" [by the way, sucking the venom of a rattlesnake doesn't help, if you've ever heard that]), and an allusion to Satan (the jackal.) o^o But, it's poetry, and the interpretation varies wildly with the person. (Trust me, I'm doing a research paper for my AP Lit. class now...and damn these people are contradicting.)
So, overall, thanks a whole bunch of bananas (I don't know) for the comment. I love them.
I write religious poetry all the time. TT-TT It's this horrible "I'm agnostic but not really whatever lol" type of blargh. I mean, sometimes it's okay. I really like Biblical allusion poetry, like this. It's just so much fun!