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if i could concentrate over
seven hundred thousand eyes
thumping
at the roof to the numbers stepping
from the nicities & rows

to go back
recoil
to the shattered surface
& the ripples beating over the hang
halfway between shallow
and shore

biting lips. maybe--
no
she couldn't have known

that it takes a whole three minutes
for the lungs to




well, maybe she


who, oh well
                         oh wait

the white; the haze--
the booming over
the spume and spray

stop changing
disturbing
me get out of my head

just pull up the shutters
step outside
my tongue the weight to talk
it out

but that's all we'll ever be:
a match burning itself out for
fun
under the backspray of someone else's wheels
A girl drowned herself last year, and it takes a whole 3 minutes, you know? They said she was happy the days before, but I know they smile when they know it's going to over too. The papers said she was a poet, depressed. When he still thought she was kidnapped, I told a boy she was dead. He cried and I felt nothing. Did nothing.

But, I think about her a lot, about drowning, about him and about me. 

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I got a DLD:

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:iconlocosquirrel:
locosquirrel Featured By Owner Edited Jul 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Let me tell you, wow-- that last stanza has been replaying in my head for weeks. After I had forgotten the rest of the poem and then forgot where the words came from (book? quote? movie? poem? which one?)  those words have popped into my brain like a song that won't die and every time they get me. I'm so glad to rediscover their origin, the whole poem is so powerful and well done, bravo. 
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you found it again. ^-^
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:iconlocosquirrel:
locosquirrel Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Now I can get the whole thing stuck in my head :D (Big Grin) 
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ghearradh Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
oh boy. i'm speechless.
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thanks. :heart: 
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is lovely. So sad, but you did a wonderful job at conveying all the feelings that occur about something like that.

Congrats on the DLD!
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the comment! :) I'm glad you liked it. & thanks! ^^
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :D
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thesquareroot Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
bonus points for "spume"
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe, thanks. ^^ It's a word people don't use often enough. 
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our "Pick of the Day". It is featured in a news article here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Achingly beautiful.

a match burning itself out describes me.  
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart: 

It describes you, eh? Well, we must have quiet a bit in common then. :)
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:icontheemptychest:
TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
You're welcome. :D

Judging by this poem, I'd say we do. :heart:
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KarynRH Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I could be wrong but while you "felt nothing" at the time you talked to the boy, it seems you feel something now. Or at least the incident is trying to burrow in and make you feel something now.

But I could be wrong.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I feel a lot more now. I go through phases of lack of empathy; I actually feel rather guilty about it now...I hate seeing him. I don't like to think I hurt him like that. :/ 
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Student Writer
Hug Hug Hug 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconletmehugyouplz:
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locosquirrel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know what to say about the backstory really except that I wish that didn't happen. But I think this poem gets that feeling?Horrible things happen and I don't know, feelings get more wierd than just sadness. Thanks for writing about it.
 
The poem is so poignant and the last stanza in particular is so beautiful, great work. 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I thought I would try to capture some of that distress--if that's what you'd call it (we need more words in this language). Looks like I may have scraped that surface. :D 

Thank you so much. :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Student Writer
Wow. This. Is just so heartwrenching-ly gorgeous. Thank you for sharing.
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And thank you for the kind comment. :heart:
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014   General Artist
:wave: Hello, I just wanted to stop by and let you know you've been featured in Awesome Art.III :heart: Have a great day!
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thank you so much! I'm honored to be featured with so many other amazing artists. :heart:
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014   General Artist
You're welcome :heart: it's my pleasure :)
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ImnotamonsterXx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
tell her
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:iconinsomniaplague:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Tell who, what?
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ImnotamonsterXx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
/?/- I meant the writer who spoke openly of their feelings
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, sorry. ^^' I'm pretty slow sometimes. 
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graegirl Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is tragic. I hope that you and everybody else that was affected finds a way to cope. It was, a beautiful poem though. I've noticed that true beauty often comes from unbearable loss or a tragedy. 
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry, dear. It didn't really hurt me, I don't think. It just more stuck in my mind; the concept, my actions, etc. 
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graegirl Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I am glad that you are not hurt, but I still hope that you can stop going over this in your mind. Thank you for the watch.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :heart:
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Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's terrible... I hope I, or any of my friends, both on dA and IRL get to that point. Waaaah!
I also hope I don't ever not feel nothing when someone close to me gets hurt really badly or dies, but I'm worried that it will happen...

The whitespace in this poem emphasises the meaning so very well. The erraticism at the start adds to it too. It's brilliant!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart: I was trying to catch the "erraticism" of my thoughts & emotions & imaginings...It looks like I may have done so. :) 

I may actually do a recorded reading of this one...
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:iconkage-yami:
Kage-Yami Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, you did!

Oh? That'll be interesting...
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Alix1996 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's... Sad. It's just like (after "for the lung to") she's drowning
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's what I was going for. I guess I accomplished that. :heart:
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