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she was dead
before she hit the ground
a cell
frazzled & 60 percent water

her friends
or whatever you call them
‘seedy backwater
girl
brimming on the bus & never
wants to
haven’t  you ever seen clouds before?’

she threw a handful of stones
pinched
sinking like balloons

a hungry ghost
tracing the outline
of a breaking surface
if i could concentrate over
seven hundred thousand eyes
thumping
at the roof to the numbers stepping
from the nicities & rows

stop changing
disturbing
me get out of my head

pull up the shutters
step outside
my tongue the weight to talk
it out

that's all we'll ever be:
a match burning itself out for
fun
under the backspray of someone else's wheels


--
I can't write anything descent anymore.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Ah, thank you so very kindly! It's an honor to be featured. ^-^ I will be sure to see the other works as well.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hope you enjoy!
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   Writer
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:'D A feature!? How wonderful! :hug: Thanke ye ever so kindly for such an honor. :)
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AdmiralSilv Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very cryptic. I could spend all day trying to figure out what's going on in that second stanza.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If you want to know a bit more about what images I was working off, look for "Mistaken Identity" by Ken Wong. :meow: That's what inspired me to write this poem. XD

Thanks for the comment, by the way.
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AdmiralSilv Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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goldshroom Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome. You implement metaphors like it's your job or something.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Thanks!
And, I am trying to write poetry, right? What's more poetic than metaphors? XD Especially those that make no sense.
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