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she was dead
before she hit the ground
a cell
frazzled & 60 percent water

her friends
or whatever you call them
‘seedy backwater
girl
brimming on the bus & never
wants to
haven’t  you ever seen clouds before?’

she threw a handful of stones
pinched
sinking like balloons

a hungry ghost
tracing the outline
of a breaking surface
if i could concentrate over
seven hundred thousand eyes
thumping
at the roof to the numbers stepping
from the nicities & rows

stop changing
disturbing
me get out of my head

pull up the shutters
step outside
my tongue the weight to talk
it out

that's all we'll ever be:
a match burning itself out for
fun
under the backspray of someone else's wheels


--
I can't write anything descent anymore.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Ah, thank you so very kindly! It's an honor to be featured. ^-^ I will be sure to see the other works as well.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hope you enjoy!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:'D A feature!? How wonderful! :hug: Thanke ye ever so kindly for such an honor. :)
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AdmiralSilv Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very cryptic. I could spend all day trying to figure out what's going on in that second stanza.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If you want to know a bit more about what images I was working off, look for "Mistaken Identity" by Ken Wong. :meow: That's what inspired me to write this poem. XD

Thanks for the comment, by the way.
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AdmiralSilv Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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goldshroom Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome. You implement metaphors like it's your job or something.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Thanks!
And, I am trying to write poetry, right? What's more poetic than metaphors? XD Especially those that make no sense.
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goldshroom Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
Bonus points when the entire poem is actually an extended metaphor with many little metaphors sprinkled within. :D
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love those poems...except when they're too horribly long, and then you forget what they were talking about to start with. XD
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gumimegpoid13 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I absolutely love this.
It's so beautiful and amazing~ :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: Oh, thank you ever so kindly. I'm glad you like it. ^-^
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Dewdrops-in-the-Gras Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
whaddaya mean, decent? This IS decent!!!
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: If you say so.
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Dewdrops-in-the-Gras Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
IT IS. IF YOU SAY ANYTHING DIFFERENT, I'LL KILL YOU WITH MY 20,000 MILE LONG KATANA.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:noes: Ah nah, dun do dat! I don't want to die by a physics-defying katana. I really don't.
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Dewdrops-in-the-Gras Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe. Its okay!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
This is brilliant :) I just can't pick a favorite stanza I love them all :D
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awh, you're too kind, really. I personally like the first two stanzas myself. :meow:
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Thank you :) I can understand why you like those two they're really effective in setting the tone of the poem and really draw the reader in :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree not stroking my own ego or anything.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
I'm glad you do :)
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MizFrizzle19 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the last stanza. Your wording is very unique; I like it.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was a bit unsure about that stanza, so I'm glad you like it. (: Thanks for the comment and all, by the way.
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MizFrizzle19 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're quite welcome m'dear.
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oxymoronicidiom Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student Writer
This is amazing! Probably one of my favorite poems. I love the line "sinking like balloons".
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Favorite poems!? You must not read much That's a high compliment, my dear sir or ma'am.

Ah, thank you. It was inspired by Sylvia Plath's "Morning Song" (< I think it was that poem) where she describes a baby's cries as "rising like balloons." X3 I thought that image was great, but I wanted to catch the slow fall--unnoticed until it's hit the ground. So, sinking balloons fit great.
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chancerox Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is stunning. you are very talented. my favorite stanza:

a hungry ghost
tracing the outline
of a breaking surface

:heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you for those lovely compliments. I was a bit unsure how that stanza fit in with the others, so I'm glad it turned out as your favorite! XD
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Interesting...
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, sir. -Tip hat-
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013   Writer
Oh. This is fantastic.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're fantastic Thank you very much. (:
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013   Writer
You're welcome. :heart:
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