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last tuesday the house took my hand & said,
it's more of a hurricane than a fire
since he broke in & burned
my curtains
my floors
my bridges
my self
but sometimes I see her with a lighter
& she finishes what he didn't do

(I think she's afraid
of settling in,
being quiet)

but last tuesday I realized that she kept the lights on
to frighten away the bridges & the people
so no one will come inside
& smash the teacups, steal the pipes
because since he burnt her beds out
no one lives there anymore
a poem for a person. 

I need a new title. Bleh.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is cynical. I love it! :heart:

it's more of a hurricane than a fire
since he broke in & burned
my curtains
my floors 
my bridges
my self
gorgeous <3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :heart:

I feel all fuzzy inside--you're so talented yourself...your comment means a lot. :la:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
aww you! :huggle:
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DormirReverPeutEtre Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
Je n'aurai plus jamais froid
I let you the task to find a poetic translation (avoid google one), I even don't know if it can help you for the title, let's say it's just the idea that crossed my brain ending the reading
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not very good at French, but with a little help from the internet, it's something like, say, "I will never be cold again," eh? That's rather clever, I think, considering the poem, although I would have to come up with some abstract way of saying it. XD
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DormirReverPeutEtre Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
I feel "I wil never be cold again" not so good...
why not "never cold anew" ? or maybe better "cold anew ? never !"
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, it's just my French is very poor, so any translations I'm pulling out are very basic. XD Those are some good suggestions, though. Thanks!
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Macadamiannutjob Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014
I like this :D! Especially the line "Its more of a hurricane than a fire"
your poetry is fun to read! :)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. ^^
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
This is so great<33 The images and the tone are just perfect. I love it, i just love it.
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